Critique

This week we had a critique on our animations, and I asked for more, as I wanted to produce better work (psychotic) I know. But I’m thankful I got so much to work with for the next few weeks as there is no class

• This typeface is a script, so the strokes should touching (conjoined) replace with a big bold serif typeface. similar ones could be, Kepler 3 Display, Dm Serif display, IvyPresto Headline.
• Like the wiggle of the can, the lighting looks cut off in the middle.
• Work on the write on more, endings here should be round, maybe use photoshop to crop different layers, think about brush strokes, watch old school sign painters to understand how they draw on type.
• @goldenwestsignarts on instagram.
• How do you plan to combine?

I took the feedback and added it to my new motion below

JR Logo Reveal Coke Zero 2.1.mp4

Coke Zero 2.1 Remake.mp4

Coke Zero 2.3 Remake.mp4

I now have to find a way to combine all of the motion graphics for week 5

Combination

So, at first I put all the compositions into one after effects file just to see what it would look like when it all played together, and it looked like this:

Screen Recording 2026-09-15 at 09.21.06.mov

I had a few ideas on how to make these blend in together, I’m going to assume it has to follow an order and such so it’ll go in 2.1, 2.2 and then ending on 2.3, I have an idea of combining them together, which I will show here:

Screen Recording 2026-09-15 at 09.43.06.mov